写作指导
A special family member
发布日期 : 2016-06-28浏览次数 : 来源 :
短文要求：动物是人类的朋友，它们不仅陪伴我们度过了很多美好时光，有时还会带给我们意外的惊喜。现在请大家以“A special family member”为题写一篇作文，描述一下你家里的宠物。
学生习作:
It has lived with us for two years, and we all love it. Last week, my parents took me and Ben to a park. At noon, my parents were busy to get ① ready for the picnic. I walked to a river nearby. Ben followed me happily. I fell into the river when I was trying to pick a flower. Ben barked and jumped into the water at once. When my parents heard Ben bark ②, they ran to the river quickly and they saw Ben was pushing me to the bank with its mouth.
Now we love Ben more than before. We take it as a member of my family.
改错：
① to get应改为getting。“be busy doing”意为“忙于做……”，为固定搭配。
② bark 应改为barking。hear sb. doing sth.指“听见某人正在做某事”，强调动作的进行。hear sb. do sth.指“听到某人做某事”，强调结果，指听到动作的全过程。
学生习作:
A special family member
There is a special animal in my family, a lovely dog named Ben.It has lived with us for two years, and we all love it. Last week, my parents took me and Ben to a park. At noon, my parents were busy to get ① ready for the picnic. I walked to a river nearby. Ben followed me happily. I fell into the river when I was trying to pick a flower. Ben barked and jumped into the water at once. When my parents heard Ben bark ②, they ran to the river quickly and they saw Ben was pushing me to the bank with its mouth.
Now we love Ben more than before. We take it as a member of my family.
改错：
① to get应改为getting。“be busy doing”意为“忙于做……”，为固定搭配。
② bark 应改为barking。hear sb. doing sth.指“听见某人正在做某事”，强调动作的进行。hear sb. do sth.指“听到某人做某事”，强调结果，指听到动作的全过程。